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Awake on strong, black coffee drinks
Words on paper, liquid ink
Dreams of pen tips, future lies
Tragic stories, quotes of the wise
Nights have carved their dark, deep valleys
In the hollows of my eyes

For you see, my friend, when writers cry
There are no tears, their cheeks are dry
But ink dipped fingers, worn out wrists
Chewed up nails and bloody fists

You see, it's strange when writers cry
Their hearts are true, their words don’t lie
They mourn in silence for a few days
Of paper cuts and tear-less haze

Of coffee mugs and smoky paper
Liquid spills, and water vapor
Sorry dreams and wasted hours
Putrid smells and dying flowers

(Torn to pieces from inside
Tears are hidden by our pride)
...........................please add a comment and i hope you like it :)...............
(its been a while since i wrote a poem that rhymes)

........edit!!...........
oh my god this is the first piece i post that reaches 200 comments im so happy...yay!
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:iconweeya1:
weeya1 Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2014
That really, truly explaines about us, wrighters.

This is really beautiful. =D
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:iconthelaughingdreamer:
TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much :)
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:iconweeya1:
weeya1 Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2014
You are very welcome. =D
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lenalamf Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
this is absolutely brilliant! if i could rate this from 1 to 10 this would be over 9000!!!
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:iconthelaughingdreamer:
TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh thank you so much! Absolutely made my day :D
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:iconlenalamf:
lenalamf Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
well you're welcome, i'm just being honest! Huggle! 
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nickie101 Featured By Owner May 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
omg this is amazing
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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013
That's us. Miserable, misunderstood but still eager to write our problems away.
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TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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Harimau98 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Student General Artist
The best works of art, ore ones that you can feel the emotion from.
Emotion, the essence of art, without it, it will be nothing, not even a blank canvas, just... nothing. You have done a great job of not just showing this by your story, but your tone as well, this is truly something to tresure.
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CatfoodPhotography Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
This is beautiful. Very well done. ^_^
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Onyxpaint Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Filmographer
true dat :T
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hdsmoot Featured By Owner May 28, 2013   Photographer
As a writer this is so accurate and true the words on the page reveal the tears that never fell
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TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
aww thank you
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hdsmoot Featured By Owner May 29, 2013   Photographer
Your Welcome :)
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666Nando666 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
As a fellow writer, this is true.
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firebird2021 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
i. love. you.
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I love this! It's awesome! I've missed reading rhyming poems. This certainly doesn't feel like you rhymed for the sake of it.
I understand completely...especially as of late...I mean I was writing fanfiction and it almost turned into a diary ! <3 wonderful xxxx
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JaceonOsbon Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013
This is actually sometimes to sole reason I write, I need somewhere to vent... My sadness, my anger, my frustration, it can all be released through writing. The final part especially resonated with me, "Torn to pieces from inside, Tears are hidden by our pride."

So true. I tip my hat to you, good sir.
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TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you sir. *tips hat back* :)
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insanecowtipper Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013
nice
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hipsterowls Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013   General Artist
... Wow.
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dreamersthoughts Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This Describes exactly how I feel, I cant thank you enough for writing this. There really is a strange happiness in being understood, now if you'll excuse me, I'll be sifting through your other pieces. Thank you:)
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TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
awww thank you so much (of course i don't mind):)
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KinkyKinkster Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013
I absolutely love this. I wonder what inspired this poem though, if you care to share? Anyways, great job... Going to look at your other stuff now! \o\
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TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you and this poem was inspired simply by the enormous lack of sleep i get because of writing ;)
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serenityninja Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
amazing I love it
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HarpenHeart Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013
I love this! This is pure inspiration to me!
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ERaven77 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You caught how I feel sometimes when I write..
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ERaven77 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I really like that. Nicely put..
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moonbladethebook Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Student General Artist
so beautiful... and with me that's saying something! the only problem I had with this was I wasn't sure what you were saying, but I'm completely literary I'm not poetic. So don't mind me.
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liltecca Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Professional Writer
this is very well written and you perfectly capture the sorrow of a writers silence.
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iluvsmiles23 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Sad yet very true. I like it, very well writen.
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Sentito Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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AikiMiharu Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Amazing work. :clap:
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poeknowsprose Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013
This is a great description of how it feels to be frustrated with writing. I really love this! Good job!
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yoursingingsatellite Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haunting and beautiful. How do I capture emotions like you do??? Sorry to spam, but do you mind reading one of my poems? I've only got two so far on dA
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tiger002 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh wow, I really like this. And as a writer, i can relate. When I'm hurt, I don't cry, I'd much rather write and pour my emotions into that.
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Hygroskopika Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hi TheLaughingDreamer!

Although there are one or two lines I would have arranged a little differently regarding the rhyming scheme, your poem is very emotive and deeply touching. As several other commenters already wrote, you manage to reveal a mood many poets know, but can hardly concretize and express. Dealing with a desperate situation, you still create an intimate atmosphere - without condemning the helplessness the writer described in the poem might be going through.
This merits a compliment!

Yours, Hygroskopika
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Fishable Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I usually don't enjoy poems that much, but this one really got my attention. Nicely done, you've managed to catch the atmosphere perfectly!
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stormbreanna Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
This is effing amazing!!
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BassiePie Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
Wow..

"(Torn to pieces from inside
Tears are hidden by our pride) "

explains my situation so well.. Well-written! <3
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SunshineAndDaisies Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The second stanza, goodness me, the truth you manage to fit into there! Marvellous work, thoroughly enjoyed it.
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Ardikani4 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful, and so true. Thank you for posting this! :)

Until we meet again...

Kani
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HikariMelody Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. That is just plain amazing and captured the truth of it perfectly!
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Solyme Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
Lovely :)
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Treeonice Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
So beautiful. I'm posting to tumblr XD <3
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TaishoTan Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
Reminds me when I write my own stories for my art....Writers rejoice!
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Azumixxx Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
This is amazing! It reminds me so much of my frustration at a story when it's not working out how I planned. This is so beautiful and moving~
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