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We were on the verge of wisdom but
So young, still.
As young as the freshly born flowers,
Too weak for winter, too strong for love.

We've believed often that the world 
Belonged to us
And we let our emotions take us deep.
We were young lovers,
Young haters,
Young liars,
And young fools.

My mother taught me to block out my tears.
She said that when we start feeling, truly feeling
We will sink into the abyss of madness.

"I will never love. I will never hate," said the golden girl.
"I will never cry. I will never fear," said she.


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AkatsukiLoverXDX3 Featured By Owner May 16, 2013  Professional General Artist
This is awsome..Gives me an airy empty feeling..Thank you. :3
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TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner May 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much :)
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incogxito Featured By Owner May 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
WoW it's really beautiful. The young emotions beautifully expressed. Love it :love:
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TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner May 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much :)
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Bark Featured By Owner May 16, 2013  Professional Writer
An interesting idea. I really like the last two stanzas. The first two seem a little confused, but I guess that's what young love is. To me, this piece has the ability to be very powerful if it were tinkered around with a little more.
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TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner May 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I agree not my best piece. They were lots of ideas and I realized when I was done that they weren't very organized
Thank you very much :)
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Bark Featured By Owner May 16, 2013  Professional Writer
Don't give up on it, it has the makings of something great! :)
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rusticlyricist Featured By Owner May 16, 2013  Student General Artist
I like it!
Just a little opinion, Idk if that last stanza really fits with the rest of the poem... but I still like it xD
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TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner May 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :)
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rusticlyricist Featured By Owner May 16, 2013  Student General Artist
you are welcome!
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