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On your left cheek bone, you had a long, dark scar
That you've earned when you fought their brutal war
And five broken bones in your slender hands
That you've cracked in a fight of a few damned lands
You deny but I've seen the light limp in your knee
Twisted in a ship at the heart of the sea
You pretend it was fine just to hide your pain
But I see your tears through the thickest rain
And in silent nights I can feel your cries
Just beneath my skin. They uncover your lies
The lies that you've told of how you're doing alright
Though the soldier in you is in constant fight
In silent nights, behind your shut door
You still see your friend, as he bleeds on the floor
You still hear the bullet that pierced your knee
And the scream of a boy who tried to flee
And the smoke and the rain and the inch deep mud
And the deaths and the pains and the fresh red blood
And you know that beneath all your skin deep scars
It won't be the same. You forgot who you are
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ezradeacon Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your wonderful poem has been featured here. :)
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Bluefish2D Featured By Owner May 5, 2013
Wow, just wow. So powerful
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:iconthelaughingdreamer:
TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you
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ellymango Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. I'm not big on poetry, but this is powerful. That last line has such impact. And you made the whole thing rhyme.
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:iconthelaughingdreamer:
TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much :)
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ellymango Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Welcome ^_^
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Queens-of-Chaos Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013  Student General Artist
Wow, this has such a powerful message and such vivid imagery. I simply love it. And the last lines: "It won't be the same. You forgot who you are." Brilliant.
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:iconthelaughingdreamer:
TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you very much :)
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Queens-of-Chaos Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Student General Artist
You're most welcome c:
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TheScourgeDragon Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
WOW. You made this incredibly deep WHILE RHYMING.
That takes serious skill.
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