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There used to be a silent moon
Watching me as I carried the world
Upon my shoulders.

The moon has dangerously kindled at
The agony that scrubbed each
And every bone I had with sharpened blades.

It was all I could ever do to hold on:
You were a weight on your own and
The world was another weight itself.
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blubrryblu Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013
I don't understand how anyone's writing could possibly be so perfect. All your poems are just absolutely beautiful; so inspiring. This is just an absolutely lovely poem too; brilliant work. I love writing (but am horrendous at it) so I really look up to inspiring authors like you. Keep up the amazing work!
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TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you so much. im very glad you like my poems :)
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Mission-46 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013
Beautiful poem!!! The last 3 lines say so much!!! Tc and God bless
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TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
oh thank you so much :)
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KinkyKinkster Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013
I think its good, but I almost want it to be longer. Not in a bad way, just I want to understand what the silent moon is and who is carrying everything is more. If that makes sense. XD
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TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes it makes sense but I think that sometimes the unsaid details make the poem sound better because the reader can think more and sometimes relate to it in your own way so ill leave all the guesswork for you :)
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KinkyKinkster Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013
Heh, as it should be. I'll always be curious to the author's interpretation, or whatever. I already have related to my self though, just after reading it. \o\
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TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
ok good then the my purpose is achieved :)
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incogxito Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful, specially the last three lines <3
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TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much :)
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